Angels' Dares (Part 2)
Read Part 1 here.
Autumn night, and the colors of this world are deeper. And our world, if you recall, was already more saturated, dripping cobalt and crimson and chocolate like the rain off my body when I slipped into that party. I found you, as expected: a wicked half-smile, bottle of beer, as many women as your free hand allowed you to count. One finger for each of them. How is it that you manage to do that?
No matter. That door's closed behind us, the party's noise receding. I am hiking through the rain again, but this time it's with you. I speed up. I shall not fall into your orbit.
I'm in the middle of the street and by the driver's door before you've time to reach out a hand, as if standing out of arm's reach means staying out of harm's way. We're a car's distance apart and still I see the horizon of your lips.
Autumn night, and the colors of this world are deeper. And our world, if you recall, was already more saturated, dripping cobalt and crimson and chocolate like the rain off my body when I slipped into that party. I found you, as expected: a wicked half-smile, bottle of beer, as many women as your free hand allowed you to count. One finger for each of them. How is it that you manage to do that?
No matter. That door's closed behind us, the party's noise receding. I am hiking through the rain again, but this time it's with you. I speed up. I shall not fall into your orbit.
I'm in the middle of the street and by the driver's door before you've time to reach out a hand, as if standing out of arm's reach means staying out of harm's way. We're a car's distance apart and still I see the horizon of your lips.
Labels: Angels' Dares, fiction



6 Comments:
Who says sequels aren't as good as the original?
I liked the second installment very much. Particularly the color choices that you incorporated. Where did they come from? And will there be a part three?
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Grad School Reject, At
Fri Nov 10, 09:15:00 PM 2006
I love this Jill! No words can follow it up.
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ChickyBabe, At
Sat Nov 11, 10:57:00 PM 2006
GSR: Thanks! Colors: eyes, lips, hair, of course! There will definitely be a part three. I don't know where the story is going yet, but it will be fun to find out. Email forthcoming; I've been running errands, etc.
I am honored, CB.
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Jill, At
Sat Nov 11, 11:49:00 PM 2006
Very pretty words. And evocative. Things like those last five wordsthe whole thing for that matterwill mean something different for every reader. I love that.
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peefer, At
Mon Nov 13, 01:59:00 PM 2006
Very pretty words. And evocative. Things like those last five wordsthe whole thing for that matterwill mean something different for every reader. I love that.
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peefer, At
Mon Nov 13, 01:59:00 PM 2006
Excellent writing. . . . but I don't feel up to commenting on that right now. So a question instead. . . . Is that the fruit stripe bra you're wearing?
By
Spaceman Spiff, At
Mon Nov 13, 04:53:00 PM 2006
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