Etched
I think she is lovely, feisty, fun. Her impatience makes me laugh.
Then I find out who she is. How odd, I think.
It is not a match I would have made among a crowd: her icy glamour, your easy grace.
You look like, if you love someone, you would give her everything you have.
She looks like she would take it.
What does she see? Does she think she is better-looking than you are? Probably.
I think no more until I see you again.
Entirely by coincidence, we are standing much too close.
The world opens when you smile at me.
Her coy smile. Her impatience. She acts like you are wrapped around her finger.
(The one with the diamond.)
I leave, determined to forget.
You never would have known.
Then I find out who she is. How odd, I think.
It is not a match I would have made among a crowd: her icy glamour, your easy grace.
You look like, if you love someone, you would give her everything you have.
She looks like she would take it.
What does she see? Does she think she is better-looking than you are? Probably.
I think no more until I see you again.
Entirely by coincidence, we are standing much too close.
The world opens when you smile at me.
Her coy smile. Her impatience. She acts like you are wrapped around her finger.
(The one with the diamond.)
I leave, determined to forget.
You never would have known.
Labels: Longing may be elegant but it also hurts like hell, poesy
posted by Jill at
11:23 AM
26 Comments:
By the sounds of it, I'd say, "His loss".
Lovely post, Jill.
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ChickyBabe, At
Sun Dec 11, 05:03:00 PM 2005
I agree with Chickybabe - absolutely his loss. I love the way you wrote about the encounter.
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Marissa, At
Sun Dec 11, 07:17:00 PM 2005
Wow. Love the poem and will also say his loss.
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Cheryl, At
Sun Dec 11, 08:00:00 PM 2005
Ah, it's great to have "the girls." (Not that I don't love you boys as well.)
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Jill, At
Sun Dec 11, 11:26:00 PM 2005
I've asked my wife to practice an icy stare and smirk so that other women will like me more. Works like a charm ;)
By
ducklet, At
Mon Dec 12, 08:32:00 AM 2005
Oh, Brandon!
{Really, that's all I've got for you right now.}
{Except, maybe, go finger your F5.}
Oh, Brandon.
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Jill, At
Mon Dec 12, 10:28:00 AM 2005
The only reason she had an icy stare was because she was entirely too aware of who you are...and you are wonderful. :)
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Kendra, At
Mon Dec 12, 10:32:00 AM 2005
There've been times I wondered if that kind of thing were going on in other people's heads. Sometimes, it's quite "interesting" to get that kind of look into someone's head.
And, I find myself wanting to ask "who, what, when, where and, most importantly, why?" Instead, though, I'll just enjoy the writing and the peek.
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Network Geek, At
Mon Dec 12, 11:01:00 AM 2005
I don't understand this post, but I'm going to go get high and try it again.
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Dirk the Feeble, At
Mon Dec 12, 12:06:00 PM 2005
Thanks, KC!
Network Geek:The details of this one would just make it confusing. Trust me.
But, I see that it's already confusing for Armaedes. Dude, just let me know if you need me to explain it. No problem at all.
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Jill, At
Mon Dec 12, 12:10:00 PM 2005
I read that three times. Once, because you wrote it. Again, to get it. And again, to enjoy it. No, I have no reason to suck up.
By
peefer, At
Mon Dec 12, 01:41:00 PM 2005
Thank you, Peefer. Most sincerely.
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Jill, At
Mon Dec 12, 02:09:00 PM 2005
Sometime, I'll have to tell you the story of my divorce. People literally lose track of who's who unless I draw an org chart. My life was a telenovela. "La Vida Loca del Jaime".
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Network Geek, At
Mon Dec 12, 02:15:00 PM 2005
I wonder if she or he will wake up first?
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Popeye, At
Mon Dec 12, 03:29:00 PM 2005
lovely...truly. so frustrating.
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Amanda, At
Mon Dec 12, 04:26:00 PM 2005
I think we all live soap operas sometimes, Network Geek.
Popeye: I wonder... ;)
Thanks, Amanda
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Jill, At
Mon Dec 12, 06:52:00 PM 2005
To capture a moment in so few words, is indeed art. Love it.
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Steph, At
Mon Dec 12, 08:59:00 PM 2005
That's really beautiful, but oh, so sad.
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Danielle, At
Mon Dec 12, 09:37:00 PM 2005
"Entirely by coincidence, we are standing much to close."
I could crawl into that phrase.
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Sass, At
Mon Dec 12, 10:01:00 PM 2005
Sometimes, you open your eyes, and someone's just standing there staring at you. Coincidence?
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Jill, At
Mon Dec 12, 10:38:00 PM 2005
nice, very nice, jill.
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still_figuring_out, At
Mon Dec 12, 11:04:00 PM 2005
Jill, After watching Serendipity yesterday. . . I don't know th history here but coincidences are things we will.
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Sass, At
Mon Dec 12, 11:09:00 PM 2005
I really liked that movie. I thought that whole stunt with the book and the bill was absolutely insane, (in other words, the whole premise...but it was necessary to prove the theme) but I really liked the movie. And I guess I thought that was insane because I, too, believe that we have to will things to happen. So don't you ladies worry about me. I'm nothing if not strong-willed.
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Jill, At
Mon Dec 12, 11:41:00 PM 2005
Stunningly beautiful. I'm amazed you could capture this in so few words.
I'm becoming such a fan of you and Brandon. You're both so talented. I feel lucky to have found your blog.
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Megan, At
Tue Dec 13, 12:15:00 AM 2005
Thank you so much, Megan.
(Hey Brandon, did you hear that? To get grouped with me, you lucky boy! ;) )
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Jill, At
Tue Dec 13, 12:25:00 AM 2005
The trophy wife is apparently not the way to go then, huh? I'll have to remember that when I get older. I think the best line is "She looks like she would take it". OOOH. . . . somebody made an assumption based on appearance. I was going to try and be all instigaty (made up word) and tease you a little. . . . but I'm just not really in the mood. Speaking of made up words, how is writhscum working out for you.
By
lil'bitty, At
Tue Dec 13, 10:51:00 AM 2005
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