Sky
The first time I call you sweetheart, it is light, flirtatious.
A throwaway line.
You are silent.
You think it is me trying to finesse a man
into letting me have my way.
Or me trying to convince a man
not to feel taken in
for letting me have my way.
And you are right.
Of course I don’t tell you that, but you are right.
Partly.
(But I really do think you are sweet.)
You do not want to be called sweetheart.
Did you let someone have her way once too often?
Forgive me. I was just getting warmed up.
What exactly did you want me to say?
That your voice drips over me like melted chocolate?
That the sky is like when I ask you to marry me?
I would.
But I’d need to be very, very drunk.
“Melted chocolate?”
Oh, it shocked me, too.
Try on “sweetheart” while you’re at it.
Or “I’m such the fucking man!”
Compared to what you didn't say, it would be much closer to reality.
So I'm okay with that. For now.
Labels: Longing may be elegant but it also hurts like hell, poesy


18 Comments:
Shocked me too - I am a sucker for this use of language: ' voice drips over me like melted chocolate' warm and inviting, silky and smooth. Hmm, I think I need to go make some brownies.
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Daniel, At
Thu Dec 01, 01:11:00 AM 2005
Funny, I always compare voices to normally fluid things, like syrup and alcohol: "Her voice was like good Scotch. It burned at first, but left me feeling warm. Like liquid fire."
Do you write things like that for your BF? Do writer chicks write love letters to their men? Or, does that only work the other direction?
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Network Geek, At
Thu Dec 01, 07:21:00 AM 2005
Jill -What did we say about getting to close to the glue bottle?
;)
J/K
Nice words.
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Neo, At
Thu Dec 01, 10:10:00 AM 2005
nice, hot, again.
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Amanda, At
Thu Dec 01, 12:26:00 PM 2005
Daniel: mmmm...brownies...
Network Geek: When I was younger, I was very forthcoming in that way. I don't want to sound like I'm placing blame, so I'll just say that eventually that changed. Recently, I've been getting back to my old self. So I guess the answer is yes, some do--if she hasn't yet been sarcasm-ed (or something else-d) into silence, or if she has relearned what it is like to just enjoy giving.
Neo: Thanks, and thanks for the visit.
Amanda: thanks, sweetie. see you later.
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Jill, At
Thu Dec 01, 12:48:00 PM 2005
The chocolate line--nice.
and
Spike Night!
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Kiki, At
Thu Dec 01, 02:26:00 PM 2005
That post made me hungry for chocolate, or sex, or maybe both. Just kidding, but calling someone sweetie is ok in my book, but that is about where the pet name calling ends with me. It's never good to make people puke around you when you see a couple calling each other honey bubby sugar cakes and sappy stuff like that.
So I'm a firt time visitor, a rookie. Do I have to write-up something poetic to get pass blog initiation around here or am I good to go without that?
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DIAMONDKT, At
Thu Dec 01, 04:36:00 PM 2005
Hey Kiki--read your post about the roses. Did I mention that was sooo sweet? Isn't chocolate great?!? And Spike? Oh, and chocolate on Spike...now there's an idea.
Diamondkt: if you were hungry for chocolate, or sex, or both, then I think I accomplished what I set out to do! Thanks for stopping by. No initiation necessary; I'm just happy my writing could make a man hungry!
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Jill, At
Thu Dec 01, 05:19:00 PM 2005
Love this. I also love the photo of Florence...was just there!
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Marissa, At
Thu Dec 01, 05:28:00 PM 2005
Forget the chocolate part. That just made me hot.
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Neil, At
Thu Dec 01, 05:34:00 PM 2005
You know, it occurred to me on the way home tonight that I'd trade a kidney for a girl who cared enough to write me love letters. Even bad love letters. I'd be a little uncomfortable with them, either way, but only because I wouldn't know what to do with someone who had that depth of emotion focused on me.
I hope your own personal network geek appreciates your gifts, writing and otherwise.
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Network Geek, At
Thu Dec 01, 08:53:00 PM 2005
I love your writing. And I love Venice. And I'm back to blogging.
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Brookelina, At
Thu Dec 01, 08:58:00 PM 2005
Marissa: Florence (swoon) is my favorite city (deep sigh). I'm going to post about that soon.
YES! I MADE NEIL HOT!
(Thanks.)
Network Geek: As I have become older and wiser, I have learned to dole myself out in small doses so as not to make anyone uncomfortable. Of course, as I have become older and wiser, I have also learned how to choose friends/partners who could handle me. Thus, I have learned to become less forthcoming as I have learned to find more people would could handle my forthcoming-ness. Someday, soon I hope, it'll all even out.
Brooke: Happy to have you back so we can swoon over Viggo and (not) tell sordid stories. Thanks for the love. It means a lot.
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Jill, At
Thu Dec 01, 11:43:00 PM 2005
(I really like using ()'s)
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Popeye, At
Fri Dec 02, 12:11:00 AM 2005
there's an old king named mithridates who subscribed to that small doses theory. except he was referring to poison, and, well, it didn't work. you should feel free to be as forthcoming as feels comfortable. i can handle it.
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ducklet, At
Fri Dec 02, 03:17:00 AM 2005
Popeye: Are you mocking my use of punctuation?
Brando: And what else can you handle? ;)
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Jill, At
Fri Dec 02, 10:52:00 AM 2005
I feel the same way about calling guys babe which is kind of funny
All of these bottled emotions are the equivalent to chasing after one another on the playground. Why do we do it to ourselves? Ugh, there is that.
Well written Miss Jill.
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Sass, At
Fri Dec 02, 02:54:00 PM 2005
Thanks, Miss Sass!
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Jill, At
Fri Dec 02, 05:28:00 PM 2005
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